Maybe an analogous secret in the first part of the intro, “its not a secret like this” it’s a real secret, a little joke to something—cognition is just thinking, but then define how its different—bring the thesis up higher in the speech, its about 210 before you hit it—I think the adhd should come instead of or at least before the psychological diagnosis part—you need more contrast between the examples that you list of things you have done at extreme speed and the small examples within the speech , those need to sound organic and comfortable—when you repeat “really don’t find our stride” what part of it are you trying to emphasize?—give me 20 seconds without the ipad so I can see the gesturing, its very repetitive—do you want to be specific or not be specific with recommendations
Practices--Speech Lab--7/29 (Baxter)
Maybe an analogous secret in the first part of the intro, “its not a secret like this” it’s a real secret, a little joke to something—cognition is just thinking, but then define how its different—bring the thesis up higher in the speech, its about 210 before you hit it—I think the adhd should come instead of or at least before the psychological diagnosis part—you need more contrast between the examples that you list of things you have done at extreme speed and the small examples within the speech , those need to sound organic and comfortable—when you repeat “really don’t find our stride” what part of it are you trying to emphasize?—give me 20 seconds without the ipad so I can see the gesturing, its very repetitive—do you want to be specific or not be specific with recommendations